The Great SAND DUNES adventures ROCK!!!! 1 Nature
"Nature was all over me. Get it off!" Nature at the Sand Dunes was very dangerous. For example, cougers a.k.a. mountain lions, lived in the sand dunes. Nature taught me a lot of cool stuff. For instance, I learned that tiger beatles lived only in the Sand Dunes and nowhere else. And when I say, "Nature got on me", I mean it. For example, when I got to High Dune, I rolled down it and got sand in my underwear, but I shook it out. My favorite thing to watch Dallas do at High Dune was do the midget roll. This is where you jump off the High Dune and curl up in a ball. It is really fun, but I never tried it because I thought it would be painful. I missed my sister, Noa, and named a star after her. When I named the star after Noa, I kept seeing satellites and I said "Curse you, satellites". I had to make two meals. Breakfast and dinner. It was very hard and I did not like washing the dishes after serving the meal. The End.




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great job aiden i like the funny part at the biggening. i was wondering why would you want to get the nature off? i would add more detail.
P.Q.S
My praise was you used emotion for your power sentance. My question was how did nature get you? My sugestion is you should do two pargraphs.