kyle's final camping reflection
Kyle
My man, do you want to hear some of my favorite things I did on our camping trip! One of the things I did was to climb to High Dune . This was one of my favorite things to do because it took me to the top of one of the highest sand dunes in the USA and the second highest dune in the National Park. And it was such a thrilling hike to do because as you walked up, the wind started to pick up and blow sand on my legs and hit my face. It was a struggle to hike because of so many obstacles to keep going to the top. I pushed myself and felt proud that I didn’t turn back and kept on going. I also liked rolling down the sand dunes because I liked the speed of the roll and the fact that it was on pure sand. One more thing I did is just like rolling down the dunes is running down the dunes. I liked to do this because of the speed and the wind on my face. I loved playing on the sand. Do you want to go to the dunes now that I have told you some of the fun things you can do there? I really had a great time.
Now for how good our crew character is. There is some bad character in our crew. We have countless numbers of side conversations. This was bad character because side conversations are when people talk while others are talking. We also have good character because we include a lot. This is good character because we mostly let people into our games. There is also more good character in our crew. We mostly sat down at meals. This is also good character because we sat down and ate our food together. Well that is our character in our crew on the camping trip.




P.Q.S
Dude,I have a P.Q.S for you(even though you already have three)!My praise:I like your enthusiasm. My question:Why my man?Why not my peeps?And last but not least,my suggestion:Change character to community.
bye,
Iggie
reply to iggie's comment
"My man" because it was the first good beginning of my power statement that I thought of. I think your right that I should use "my peeps" instead of "my man."
p.q.s
i really like your examples for your sentences.i think you should look at your power statements.what is your power statement talking to.
reply to charly's comment
What do you mean by "what is your power statement talking to?" Do you not understand why I am saying "my man?"
Praise
My main man Kyle, I have a praise, a question, and a suggestion for you. My praise is that you were very disciptive, my question is why did you choose "my man" out of all the choices for a power statment. My suggestion is to take away a sentence about rolling down the dunes.
P.Q.S
My praise is peopele could understand most of it.My question is why did you say "my man, do you want to hear some of my favorite things I did on our camping trip"? My suggestion is to use better spelling and grammer.